Just an attempt at writing people as realistically as I can. This'll be done in two parts.
Phil sat in the restaraunt with a great deal of anxiety hanging over his shoulders. He hadn't been on a date since he was twenty-four, and that was averaging out at about a decade ago. It wasn't that he didn't have time. Instead, it was a matter of nerve. He had always had trouble with women, what they did to his senses, and the fact that his mind raced too fast about things. One moment he was looking at her, the next he was thinking about kids, and all of it goes to hell from there. But he decided to try again, when he met Molly Ivanchuk.
She was a gorgeous woman, about twenty-eight, twenty-nine. He never had the courage to ask her actual age. He didn't want to screw things up. She was a writer, and a smart one at that. Really liked sci-fi. But she smoked, which was why he was in the smoking section now... it was a habit he would be willing to put up with, for her. She was good enough to ignore little issues like that. She was smart, and funny, and a little grumpy at times but he just thought that made her all the cuter. She wasn't bashful, either.
There she is, he thought as she entered the restaurant, rubbing the back of her neck, a clear sign of nervousness. It made him feel better, to know she was nervous too. He hated the feeling that he was the only one who felt like he was bad at this game. Well, not a game. But something close. A dance, a puzzle, something.
He took a moment to look her over, and by god, she seemed to be even prettier. Instead of the brown, loose turtleneck and washed out jeans he had seen her in earlier, she was standing their in a deep blue dress, like midnight without any city lights, her pale skin accentuated by the darkness of the fabric as it showed off every curve it covered. Her orange hair was tied up in a bun like last time, but it seemed glammed up, somehow, as if the colour had been intensified, and it framed the most gorgeous face, with soft grey eyes, thin eyebrows, lips ruby red with lipstick...
"Like what you see," she said with a cheeky grin --her Ukrainian accent still thick-- knocking Phil out of his little daze and into a blush of embarassment "hm?"
Phil stuttered a little at first, but gathered himself.
Don't fuck this up, damnit.
"Heh, yeah..." He looked her up and down again. "Honestly, Mol, you look great." He said with sincerity.
She chuckled softly. Not a giggle, thank God, but a chuckle. Deep, but pleasant.
"I'm glad you think so," she said with the slightest blush on her cheeks "it's not often I dress up."
She took her seat and smiled at him for a few moments, not saying anything, before, after what seemed like a couple hundred eternities:
"You look really good yourself, Phil. I really like that shade of grey on you."
Phil was wearing a full suit, because it was that kind of restaurant, with a green tie and pearl white shirt underneath. He didn't necessarily like suits, because they made him feel like he was still at work in the firm, but this was one that had a special place in his heart, being a gift from his brother before he went off to fight in the Gulf.
"Thanks, Mol. It was a gift. Did you find the place okay?" He asked, already resorting to cliches.
Molly nodded, and smiled at him again, her perfect white teeth bared. "You know, Phil, we've gone on a few dates, but, um... We really don't know each other much, you know that?"
Phil looked down at the table, giving a brief nod in agreement. Somehow, the words made him feel like he had failed, somehow. But what could he tell her? He was an accountant who hadn't had a date in ten years and the most interesting thing that happened to him recently was someone accidentally melting their computer by removing their fan at the office.
"Well, uh... I guess we should start getting to know each other better, then," he said, mustering up some confidence and hoping it didn't sound as much like an innuendo as he feared it did.
Molly laughed. That was a good sign. She kept smiling at him, too. That was really good. It made him feel great, even.
"Alright, well, let's talk about... I don't know, childhoods? Jobs? I mean, you know what I do but I really don't know what you do."
Phil flushed a little. "Well, um... I'm an accountant."
Molly just smiled, and nodded. "I thought about doing something like that, since I'm good with numbers and I know business, but... I don't know, I just can't stand the office thing." She slowly drew her finger over to Phil's chin, and tipped it up gently. "But that's what happens when your brother moves around with you a lot."
"Brother?" Phil asked, wondering if, just perhaps, he should be worried.
Giving a quick "mmhmm!" of confirmation, a look of joyful nostalgia crossed her face, like someone returning home for the first time in a long while.
"Yes, my brother," she started "Kostyantin. Loved me dearly, and very protective. Father and mother died early on, but Kostyantin always looked out for me. We jumped from place to place and he homeschooled me... He was never very smart himself, but he was good at communicating ideas and he got help from friends. We only ever really settled down here, in Charlotte, when I needed to go to college, which was aboooouuut... nine years ago, I think. You lose track of time, sometimes."
Phil raised an eyebrow. "Why did you have to keep moving around?"
Molly's face took on an air of sadness, subtle but obvious to Phil.
"Our parents angered the wrong people, back in the USSR, and... Well, the vendetta passed onto us. The problem is dealt with, but it stuck with us for a long time."
Phil put his hand on Molly's, looking at her with genuine concern. "Listen, I'm sorry I asked. I didn't know you had it tha--"
Molly put a finger on his lips, her smile returned, much to Phil's relief. "Shh, Phil. It's okay, it's over. Besides, we're getting to know each other, aren't we?"
I like it. Although you should cut down on comma usage.
ReplyDeleteI do have a problem with commas. They're just so... versatile! In fact, I have a problem with elipses as well.
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